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Constitution Design 101, a learn-as-I-go effort. | by kelli217 | 2005-03-29 12:12:46 |
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Part 2: Article 1: Limitations of Power | by kelli217 | 2005-04-06 11:23:54 |
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Wow | by MatthewDBA | 2005-04-08 12:27:04 |
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Wow indeed. Gotta lock them suckers down. | by kelli217 | 2005-04-08 13:13:30 |
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by MatthewDBA |
2005-04-08 21:55:02 |
As you probably guessed from my critique of your Preamble, I don't really feel that repetition is irrelevant. Sometimes brevity can greatly assist clarity. If you have to spell it out every freaking time, then you should. But in general, if you don't have to, you shouldn't.
4) Okay, good. That will probably be manageable. (Some people may try to use this as a basis for frivolous lawsuits. I think that after you get some case law established, these will dry up.)
7) Clear now; okay. In light of what you say about repetition, though, the emphasis of "collective institutions" might bear repeating.
8) "Other residence" - I think perhaps my difficulty is that in your phrasing "their houses or other residence", the word "residence" could be considered to be modified by "their": "their houses or their other residence". If you scoped your qualifier more carefully, you could avoid any misinterpretation due to this ambiguity. Perhaps "their houses or any private residence"?
10) I agree with you about the status of life. If it isn't possible to prove guilt beyond all doubt (and I don't think it is - people don't *have* to doubt anything), perhaps it would be better or more effective simply to outlaw capital punishment?
21) $20 is very much on the low side. I'll have to think about whether there is some more precise definition which is not locked in to a specific value or monetary unit.
Looks good. I'm liking it (except for a few minor quibbles, but nothing big). |
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